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Snow In The Open Sea REDO

Rat
January 28, 2023

Snow In The Open Sea REDO

The mysterious snowstorm that blows in around the Tempus brings hidden tensions up to the surface, bringing out both the best and the worst of the crew.

Got really motivated by some notes I got on the original so I redrew the whole thing, I hope the comedy and action feels more active this time around.

Rat

January 28, 2023
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  1. Scene 0 Shot 1 Panel 1 Scene 0 Shot 1

    Panel 2 Action Notes Storm sets in around ship Scene 0 Shot 1 Panel 3 Scene 0 Shot 2 Panel 1 Action Notes Crew at work Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 1/15
  2. Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 1 Scene 0 Shot 3

    Panel 2 Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 3 Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 4 Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 2/15
  3. Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 5 Action Notes Tar falls

    Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 6 Dialog Soot: Tar! Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 7 Dialog Soot: Are you ok?! Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 8 Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 3/15
  4. Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 9 Dialog Tar: The samples

    are just fine! Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 10 Dialog Tar: This abnormal storm is very intersting- Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 11 Dialog Tars voice fades into bg rambking noise Scene 0 Shot 3 Panel 12 Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 4/15
  5. Scene 0 Shot 4 Panel 1 Dialog Tar: Wakey! Action

    Notes Tar hits Soot with the cup of snow, shocked reaction Scene 0 Shot 4 Panel 2 Dialog Tar: Ooo! This requires further testing! Action Notes Tar picks up snowball Scene 0 Shot 4 Panel 3 Dialog Tar: Ooo! This requires further testing! Action Notes They reel up, Soot/North react Scene 0 Shot 4 Panel 4 Action Notes Tar throws Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 5/15
  6. Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 1 Dialog Tar giggling Action

    Notes North reveals snowball Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 2 Action Notes North throws Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 3 Action Notes Tar is hit Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 4 Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 6/15
  7. Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 5 Scene 0 Shot 5

    Panel 6 Action Notes Tar throws Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 7 Action Notes Snowball directed at Lena Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 7/15
  8. Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 8 Dialog Len: Ack! Action

    Notes hit, Lena fumbles her throw Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 9 Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 10 Dialog North: COLD! Action Notes Snowball hits North Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 11 Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 8/15
  9. Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 12 Action Notes Soot slides

    in as camera pans out, Tar stumbling with hit Scene 0 Shot 5 Panel 13 Action Notes Tar flings all their snowballs as they fall Scene 0 Shot 6 Panel 1 Action Notes skid Scene 0 Shot 6 Panel 2 Action Notes get up Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 9/15
  10. Scene 0 Shot 7 Panel 1 Action Notes others ready

    to strike Scene 0 Shot 7 Panel 2 Action Notes flee Scene 0 Shot 7 Panel 3 Scene 0 Shot 8 Panel 1 Action Notes release of tension Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 10/15
  11. Scene 0 Shot 8 Panel 2 Action Notes Tar confused

    as the others look up in concern Scene 0 Shot 8 Panel 3 Action Notes reveal the Captain Scene 0 Shot 9 Panel 1 Scene 0 Shot 10 Panel 1 Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 11/15
  12. Scene 0 Shot 10 Panel 2 Scene 0 Shot 10

    Panel 3 Scene 0 Shot 10 Panel 4 Scene 0 Shot 10 Panel 5 Action Notes descend Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 12/15
  13. Scene 0 Shot 10 Panel 6 Scene 0 Shot 11

    Panel 1 Action Notes Soot grabs notebook Scene 0 Shot 11 Panel 2 Action Notes he hands it to Tar Scene 0 Shot 11 Panel 3 Action Notes Soot exits Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 13/15
  14. Scene 0 Shot 11 Panel 4 Scene 0 Shot 12

    Panel 1 Scene 0 Shot 12 Panel 2 Scene 0 Shot 12 Panel 3 Action Notes camera blur zoom out Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 14/15
  15. Scene 0 Shot 13 Panel 1 Scene 0 Shot 13

    Panel 2 Scene 0 Shot 13 Panel 3 Action Notes Curtain of snow covers frame Scene 0 Shot 13 Panel 4 Action Notes FIN Snow In The Open Sea (REDO) Page 15/15